The Girl on the Train: A Poem by Gilbert Huntly *

Introduced by LD: This charming little poem was written by our resident poet Gilbert Huntly last week, fresh from the farm, with mud still on his boots. The poem derives much of its charm from its quaint literary style. Gilbert’s diction  has been strongly influenced, as you will see, by the great poets of the 19th century.

This particular poem could almost be a pastiche (if not a parody) of the ‘Lucy’ poems of William Wordsworth (1770-1850), especially the short 12-line lyric ending with the famous stanza:

She lived unknown, and few could know
When Lucy ceased to be;
But she is in her grave, and oh
The difference to me!

Gilbert’s poem has a poignant modern twist, however, which would have been quite alien to the conventional-minded Wordsworth.

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THE  GIRL  ON  THE  TRAIN

by Gilbert Huntly

She stepped upon the boarding deck—
My heart leapt to my throat!
And then I knew that I beheld
A lass of worthy note!

Her graceful poise, her comely face
As she scanned the coach’s seats
Did strike a chord of fearful thought
My eyes with hers should meet!

Afraid I was, lest she should see
Discomfort in my poise,
And know I was unsettled then,
Aside from train’s loud noise . . .

She chose a seat across from mine,
There placed her graceful form;
And I knew then that all I’d sworn
Was empty and forlorn!

She looked me in the eye. Her stare,
As cold as Arctic winds can be,
Pierced my sick heart. A black despair
Then froze my bones—and finished me! 

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25 thoughts on “The Girl on the Train: A Poem by Gilbert Huntly *

  1. Yes, Gilbert, feminine power is hard to melt let alone understand. In my limited experience women appreciate a man who makes them laugh and can laugh at himself. A good piece of poetry!

  2. Gilbert,

    I like your poem. Well done! Smitten, huh? You got smitten by this gal in a train? Happens sometimes, we all get smitten Gilbert, one time or another. I got smitten when I was 18. The guy got smitten too. We were both smitten. But it wasn’t on a train.

    It was in a restaurant.

    I flashed him my nicest smile from across the room, five tables away . He glowered back at me, refusing to smile back. That didn’t bother me. I turned up the heat, smiling real hard. Kept it up for 10 minutes. Gave him a wink too.

    After 15 minutes he relented. Quirked his lips in a reluctant smilet. Like maybe he wanted to cancel the smile in case I got ideas and rushed over and jumped into his lap.

    No way. Butterfly played it cool. Became all haughty and remote, like I regretted my forwardness. Managed to put on a blush. Not easy, but blushes can be switched on with practice.

    We were married six months later.

    Divorced three years after that.

    I’ve still got a child to prove it. Esmerelda with the azure eyes.

    1. Hey Sister Monica, don’t delete that! I know it’s off-topic but I’m in an off-topic mood today. Be a darling and let’s have a little rest from Jews on this thread, okay? I mean, this poem is ITSELF off-topic. Nothing about the Holocaust here, as far as I can see……..

      1. Feel free to express your “thoughts”, madame. But try not to insult Sardonicus with aspersions of psychopathy. I believe he is a respectable gentleman of irreproachable virtue.

  3. Madame Butterfly, babe :

    Who takes care of Esmeralda when you’re in your apt. with all the blinds closed in the dark face-down on the kitchen floor passed out from TOO much booze and TOO many sleeping pils and there’s NO food in the house? Is that why your husband divorced you and couldn’t wait to get away from you? I bet Esmeralda is real proud to have big-time boozer/pill-popping drug addict for a mother, 😉

  4. This is quite a remarkable poem for this antisemitic site. It contains no Jew bashing! I can’t help wondering though if the beautiful lady who got under your skin on that train was Jewish. Did you know that some of the greatest femmes fatales of history have been “Jewesses”?

    There is something about Jewish beauty that is quite unique. I think it’s the slightly Asiatic look: the highcheek bones, the slanted eyes, the sultry eroticism exuded by centuries of underground existence in the great cities of Europe.

    I have no time for those antisemites who profess to find ugliness even in the most attractive Jewish women. They must be crazy. Jewish women are among the most beautiful in the world.

    What goy wouldn’t give his eye-teeth to sleep with a beautiful “Jewess” like this — the femme fatale silent screen actress Theda Bara who once played Cleopatra?

    https://vickielester.files.wordpress.com/2013/10/bara-theda-cleopatra_01.jpg

      1. Sister Monica is not in the office today, Madame Butterfly, Sister’s in Assisi , that’s in Italy, JESUIT TEILHARD DE HARDIN NEW AGE NWO poop NWO JESUIT francis territory, holding hands with the buddhists, the hindoos, the zulus, the lutherans, the joos, the sufis, the subuds, the bektashis, the aztecs and aztlans, the sunnis, the aborigines of australia and borneo, and only gawd knows who else, though WE know there’s NO traditional PRE- VATICAN-TWO/PRE-NEW-AGE-NWO NOVUS-ORDO REAL CATHOLICS there in New Age Assissi holding hands and Invoking in Circular Motion Circles no doubt their multitude of Voices AS ONE VOICE Rising Up Singing Praising Lauding The Canticle of The Sun,

        “O Brutha SUN, O Sista Dark MOON….. O How I LERV U! I WORSHIP U! I ADORE U!”
        “O SUN AND MOTHER GODDESS DARK MOON MAMA! O KUMBAYA RELIGIOUS LIFE IS SO GROOVY!!

        Sister is way ahead of the Spiritual Curve! The NWO cabal/ilk power and principality types runs away SCARED SCARED SCARED WHEN OUR NEW AGE NWO MOTHER SUPERIOR COMES AROUND!! THE NWO POWER AND PRINCIPLAITY TYPES ARE SCARED SHITLESS OF TEILHARD DE CHARDIN’S TYPE NEW AGE NWO SPIRITUALITY IT HAS SO MUCH LIGHT AND SO MUCH HARD-HITTING RELIGIOUS POWER TO DEFEAT THE NEW AGE NWO!! CHANT TO SHIVA AND KALI FOR OUR “CATHOLIC” SISTER’S GOOD SUCCESS IN ASSISSI!!

      1. LOBRO
        THE JEWISH WOMEN are beautiful inside and out ,their inner beauty comes from God
        they are loyal and sincere and a divine treasure for the ones who have the keen ability to recognize and treasure this divine beauty.

    1. I find this poem profoundly anti-semitic, albeit its Jew hate is expressed by canny omission, for the simple reason that THERE IS NO JEW IN IT. Clearly a Goyisch desire to do away with Jews.

  5. What chants and tu what “god” or “gods” or guru or gurus or whatever, whoever, du I need to Chant tu tu call upon the crypto Ganeesh the Flying Elepant hindoo joo tu get me outta here before the HERicane hits Florida? I want out!

  6. Gilbert Huntly
    not bad poem for a cowboy ,well done Mr.at least it takes your mind away from blaming everything on the Jews.

    1. I have met and known some very attractive (and beautiful!) Jewesses – in case anyone should doubt it. My eye for beautiful women is not confined to religious dogma.

      1. Well ain’t that sweet, bless Gilby’s open-hearted NON-anti-semitic PRO-heebie jeebie heart, Gilby and his jew girlfriend, how very genteel Southern Knight of the Golden Circle, Gilby and his heebie jeebie girl sweetheart, it’s time for TEA for TWO, I guess, 😉 ,

        https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jbo_0R8mpbU

  7. Sweet poem.It removed the dust from every one’s memory of the girl on the train. I wish I could express mine through poetry.

  8. Straining

    I saw a woman on a train
    And I asked her, “Where’s my brain?”
    “Well that explains the puzzled look!”
    And then she hit me with her book.

    “I was only asking, no need for that”
    She hit me harder with the back.
    I read the blurb and fancy that:
    “Many Moods” by E.J. Pratt.

    “Now look here Miss, you’re for it now”
    She flung the book at my brow.
    Now my name is Rick O’Shea
    After bouncing of me head that day.

    So if you see a gal on a train,
    Reading a book from the public domain:
    Don’t ask her where your head is at
    She might just hit you with Mr Pratt.

      1. “I Be Havin’ Science Droppin’ On Me sheeeiiit”

        by : BoogieDownLeroy

        I met a sista on de subway
        we were both heading Uptown de end of de day
        headin’ back home to Harlem, our Heaven Haven
        I was lookin’ at her, givin’ Her de eye
        She said, “what you be lookin’ at nigga,
        I aint’ one of your hoes, get lost, go away”
        I said, ” I just be lookin’ at you ’cause you be beautiful,
        that’s all I’m doin’
        you look like de ancient Empress Cleopatra”

        She be sayin, ” I ain’t Her, I was Empress Nerfiti
        in my past life, nigga, get it right or go away”
        “I be a Jah way torah black jew sista from mali sheeeiiitt”
        “You be wantin’ to go out with me Mama,
        let’s get IT ON TWOgether!” I exclaimed!
        She said: “I be havin’ better things to do with my time,
        I’m going home and goin’ online
        to my ALL TIME favorite place
        TO Sista Lasha’s Belly Dancing blog, sheeeiiit!
        I ain’t got no time for no low class niggas—
        not when I got Lasha to teach me how to Belly Dance”,

        subway sista, she be very authoritative with me, sheeeiitt!
        “Oh I be knowing about Lasha tuu,
        she be a fine fine Moon Goddess BLACK jew nigga Mama!”
        “Darkmoon be droppin’ Science on Us all de time” I be sayin’
        “Who be you favorite character on de Dark Side over there?”
        I asked de savvy sista.
        Nerfiti say she be likin’ Woeobro de best!
        De sista said de nigga Woebro be lervin’ de takfiris
        and that mean he be one down-with-it nigga jew,
        that what our sista be sayin’!

        Me and her, we be Soul Sistas
        TWO nigger jew Sistas In-Sync.
        “YO MAMA I just can’t compete:
        de subway was never my favorite form
        of transportation to tell you honestly.
        dis nigga prefers to travel via astral projection,
        I’m looking for some Ecstasy!!!!
        I be needin’ some Ecstasy!
        I be readin’ TOO much depressing shit in de news lately!

    1. @ Gilbert Huntly

      Congratulations, Gilbert! I see you’ve now had your poem about that girl on the train translated into Bulgarian! So have I, incidentally. By the same guy, name of ‘Zahariada’, who translated your poem.

      Take a look. Here’s the guy who’s made us famous in Bulgaria! 🙂

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